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Tears running down my face
Yearn to scream "Don't Go"
However I know what is best
Therefore I'll let you go

Tears falling down my face
Yearn to whisper "Stay here"
Inside this is my wish
But You really want to leave
...............

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Palett-de-Fru-It Jun 23, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
I like this. The similar verses are very nice, a good emphasis on the sad mood. Perhaps you should consider some punctuation? Just a light suggestion, seeing there's not much else for me to say.
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TysonMerrit Jun 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
The reason for the lack of punctuation is because of the face, I didn't know how to add it ;)
You're more then welcome to prof it with punctuation if you wish! :)
Thanks for the comment!
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AlaskaGrl Jun 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
Makes me sad. It's beautifully written though :)
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TysonMerrit Jun 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, I appreciate it a lot!
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AlaskaGrl Jun 22, 2011  Hobbyist Photographer
You're welcome :)
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